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Mr. President, Claims · 52 wordsI rise today to pay tribute to an exceptional noncommissioned officer in the U.S. Army, SGM David J.Marshall, who currently serves as the deputy chief for the Army’s Senate Liaison Division and will retire from Active Duty after 20 distinguished years of active Federal service at the end of this year.1Positioning · 82 wordsThroughout his career, Sergeant Major Marshall has personified the highest standards of Army professionalism and the soldierly values of loyalty, duty, respect, selfless service, honor, integrity, and personal courage to the Army and our Nation.Many of us on Capitol Hill have enjoyed the opportunity to work with Sergeant Major Marshall and it is my privilege to recognize his achievements.Sergeant Major Marshall is a distinguished leader whose career in the U.S. Army has been marked by unwavering dedication and exceptional service.PositioningClaims · 154 wordsBorn and raised in St. Louis, MO, Sergeant Major Marshall embarked on his military journey with a commitment to excellence that would define his decades-long career.2Enlisting as a combat documentation production specialist in 2006, Sergeant Major Marshall began his service as a combat photographer at 55th Signal Company (Combat Camera) and completed one combat deployment in support of Operation Iraqi Freedom.3He held various tactical and operational positions, including roles at American Forces Network Livorno, the Army Entertainment Detachment, the Cyber Center of Excellence Noncommissioned Officer Academy Detachment, the Defense POW/ MIA Accounting Agency, 4and 9th Psychological Operations Group (Airborne).5Sergeant Major Marshall was competitively selected to serve as an Army congressional fellow for the fiscal year 2023 and was assigned to my office.6During his fellowship, he gained valuable insights into the workings of Congress and its relationship with the U.S. military, while also advising our team on defense and veterans’ issues.Positioning · 11 wordsHis dedication and professionalism were evident in every task he undertook.PositioningClaims · 46 wordsFor the past 3 years, he has served in the Army’s Senate liaison office, 7where he has played a crucial role in answering congressional requests for information, staffing engagements between Army senior leaders and Members of Congress, and leading congressional delegations abroad to conduct defense oversight.Positioning · 22 wordsSergeant Major Marshall’s lengthy and diverse career was filled with experiences that have enriched him both as a soldier and a person.PositioningClaims · 40 wordsIt is no surprise that he has been honored with numerous military awards and decorations including the Defense Meritorious Service Medal, several Army Meritorious Service Medals, the Combat Action Badge, 8and the Signal Corps Bronze Order of Mercury, among others.9Positioning · 18 wordsHis exemplary service and steadfast leadership have earned him the respect and admiration of colleagues and superiors alike.PositioningThanks · 90 wordsAny tribute to Sergeant Major Marshall would be incomplete without acknowledging the unwavering support of his wife Jillian and the joy brought by their son Miles.10Jillian has stood by Sergeant Major Marshall at every step of his journey, providing love, care, and wisdom.On behalf of the U.S. Senate and a grateful nation, I thank Sergeant Major Marshall, his wife Jillian, son Miles, and their entire family for the commitment, sacrifices, and contributions they have made throughout his honorable military service.Congratulations on completing an exceptional and successful career.Thanks