Analysis · Floor speech · beta

Sylvia R. Garcia

376 words · 30 sentences · 35 clauses

Statement grade
A
Average 91 / 100
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Greeting 3%Procedure 3%Claims 60%Anecdote 5%Positioning 9%Reasoning 3%The ask 18%

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Greeting · 10 wordsThank you to the gentlewoman from California for the time.Greeting Mr. Speaker, Procedure · 11 wordsI am here to speak about a killing in my district.Procedure Claims · 170 wordsOn July 7, an ICE agent shot and killed Lorenzo Salgado Araujo, an unarmed man with no criminal record, who was not even the target of their investigation.12 He was headed to a construction job when ICE aggressively pursued his van in an unmarked vehicle.3 No sirens, no body cameras, no dash cameras, just two unmarked cars following him. Then, an ICE agent fired through the open passenger’s side window where Mr. Lorenzo’s brother was sitting and killed him.4 Afterward came the same disgraceful playbook we saw after the killings of Renee Good and Alex Pretti in Minneapolis.5 They claim Lorenzo, who was the driver, had weaponized his vehicle and that an agent had acted in self-defense.6 I spoke directly with two of the men inside that van. They told me ICE never identified themselves, never gave commands, and no agent was ever in front of the van. Then, in an added layer of cruelty, DHS, the Department of Homeland Security, released Mr. Salgado’s name publicly before notifying his family.7 Anecdote · 18 wordsI was at the hospital when his son had to learn, through Facebook, that his father was dead.Anecdote Positioning · 9 wordsIt was sickening. It was disheartening. It was despicable.Positioning Claims · 36 wordsDays later, DHS tried to smear Lorenzo even further by suggesting that drugs had been found in the van.8 It was not drugs. It was a homemade electrolyte mix workers use to survive the Texas heat.9 Positioning · 8 wordsThis is an outrageous abuse of government power.Positioning Claims · 19 wordsICE pursued the wrong van and killed an unarmed man who wasn’t their target and had no criminal record, Reasoning · 11 wordsand now we are expected to trust DHS to investigate itself. Positioning · 7 wordsThat is laughable. Absolutely not. No way.Positioning The ask · 27 wordsWe need a real, independent investigation.Vague promise We need all evidence released, and we need real accountability.Vague promise We also need the truth about what happened to Mr. Salgado. Positioning · 9 wordsHis family deserves the truth. The public deserves accountability.Positioning The ask · 41 wordsWe need justice for Mr. Salgado, and we need justice for all those killed at the hands of ICE or those in the custody of ICE. We demand accountability, and as the gentlewoman has said, we need real justice for all.

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