Analysis · Floor speech · beta

Nicole Malliotakis

337 words · 22 sentences · 29 clauses

Statement grade
B–
Average 72 / 100
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Greeting 8%Positioning 19%Claims 51%Promise 10%Thanks 11%

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Mr. Speaker, Greeting · 28 wordsI rise today to honor Sergeant Michael Sulsona--a decorated United States marine, gifted playwright, and beloved advocate for his fellow Staten Island veterans--who passed away sadly last week.1Greeting Positioning · 20 wordsSome people serve their country for a chapter of their lives. Mike Sulsona served his country for an entire life.Positioning Claims · 65 wordsMike joined the Marines as a teenager and served as a rifleman in Vietnam.2 On January 15, 1971, while walking point during an enemy ambush, he stepped on a land mine and lost both of his legs above the knee.3 He returned home with a Purple Heart and Bronze Star to a country that did not always give Vietnam veterans the respect they had earned.4 Positioning · 10 wordsYet, Mike refused to let his injuries define his future.Positioning Claims · 41 wordsHe earned a master of fine arts in writing and became an accomplished playwright and screenwriter, receiving four national awards, including The Kennedy Center Award for playwrighting.5 He also appeared in the Academy Award-winning film ``Born on the Fourth of July.’’6 Positioning · 7 wordsBut his greatest legacy was helping others.Positioning Claims · 51 wordsFor more than four decades, Mike devoted himself to veterans suffering from Agent Orange exposure and post-traumatic stress, as well as homeless veterans, amputees, and burn victims. He helped them with their paperwork. He made phone calls on their behalf. He answered their call whenever they needed him, day or night. Promise · 35 wordsMike also fought tirelessly to have fellow Marine Sergeant Angel Mendez’ Navy Cross upgraded to the Medal of Honor, an effort we were proud to work alongside him on and will continue on his behalf.7Vague promise Claims · 16 wordsMike once said: I put my name on the dotted line to be my brother’s keeper. Positioning · 16 wordsThat is exactly how he lived. He turned pain into purpose and a lifetime of service.Positioning Thanks · 38 wordsMy prayers are with his sons, Vincent and Philip; his grandchildren, Lucas and Madison; and all who loved him. I also remember his wife, Frieda, his partner in life and service, who passed away just months before him.8Thanks Mr. Speaker, Positioning · 10 wordsour community and country will never forget him. Semper Fidelis.Positioning

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