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Mike Bost

498 words · 31 sentences · 40 clauses

Statement grade
A+
Average 95 / 100
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Procedure 4%Claims 76%Positioning 3%Reasoning 4%Aside 11%The ask 2%

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Mr. Speaker, Procedure · 9 wordsI yield myself such time as I may consume.Procedure Mr. Speaker, Claims · 90 wordsI rise today in support of H.R. 4288, to name the Department of Veterans Affairs community-based outpatient clinic in San Jose, California, 1as the ``Corporal Patrick D. Tillman VA Clinic,’’ sponsored by Representative Panetta.2 Pat Tillman was born and raised in San Jose, California.3 He first made his name on the football field at Leland High School, helping lead his team to a Central Coast Division I championship.4 He carried that same drive and determination to Arizona State University, where he excelled both as a student and as an athlete. Mr. Speaker, Claims · 106 wordsafter being drafted by the Arizona Cardinals in 1998, by 2000, Pat had become the team’s star safety.56 He had achieved what so many young athletes dreamed of. He was playing in the NFL. He had a successful career ahead of him and could have made millions of dollars by continuing to play professional football. Yet, after the terrorist attack of September 11, 2001, Pat Tillman made a different choice.7 When his country needed him, Pat answered the call. He put the needs of his country above his own dreams, above his own career, and above the life of comfort and success that he already earned. Mr. Speaker, Positioning · 8 wordsthat is the definition of an American hero.Positioning Claims · 16 wordsWhen terrorists struck the Twin Towers, Pat, like so many other Americans, ran toward the fight. Procedure · 3 wordsPat once said: ProcedureClaims · 51 words``A lot of my family has . . . gone and fought in wars.8 And I really haven’t done a damned thing as far as laying myself on the line like that, and so I have a great deal of respect for those that have and what the flag stands for.’’ Positioning · 5 wordsThose were not empty words.Positioning Claims · 80 wordsIn 2002, Pat enlisted in the United States Army.9 He served with the 75th Ranger Regiment.10 During his second deployment--I will say that again--his second deployment, while serving in Afghanistan, in support of Operation Enduring Freedom, Pat’s unit came under attack.11 Pat died in action while providing cover for his fellow soldiers.12 Because of his courage, his fellow soldiers were able to escape danger. For his bravery and sacrifice, Pat was posthumously awarded the Purple Heart and the Silver Star.13 Mr. Speaker, Procedure · 1 wordsH.R.Procedure Claims · 35 words4288 is a fitting tribute to Pat Tillman, a son of San Jose, a professional athlete, an Army Ranger, and an American hero who gave up fame and fortune to serve the country he loved. Reasoning · 22 wordsBy naming the VA clinic after him, we would ensure that his story of courage, service, and sacrifice will continue for decades. Aside · 56 wordsThose of us who can remember Pat Tillman and remember what an amazing thing he did, to leave a career as a professional football player to serve this Nation and the flag that hangs behind you, Mr. Speaker, is something that those of us who are big football fans and a big Pat Tillman fan understand.Aside Mr. Speaker, The ask · 8 wordsI urge my colleagues to support H.R. 4288, Procedure · 8 wordsand I reserve the balance of my time.Procedure

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