Analysis · Floor speech · beta

Mark DeSaulnier

164 words · 7 sentences · 9 clauses

Statement grade
A–
Average 86 / 100
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Greeting 13%Claims 66%Positioning 12%The ask 9%

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Mr. Speaker, Greeting · 22 wordsI rise today to recognize the life and service of Sue Rainey, a remarkable public servant in the San Francisco Bay Area.Greeting Claims · 109 wordsSue served as the mayor of Moraga, California, in the late 1970s and later as the mayor of Walnut Creek, California, from 2001 to 2010, 1where she worked diligently to develop that city into the business, retail, and arts hub that it is today. She also volunteered with the Cancer Support Community in the San Francisco Bay Area for over 20 years, ultimately serving as the board chair of the San Francisco Bay Area chapter.2 Thanks to her leadership in the cancer community, the chapter now supports over 100 families each year.3 Sadly, Sue passed away last month at the age of 86, a remarkable life of 86 years.4 Positioning · 19 wordsShe will be fondly remembered for her commitment to our community, for bettering the lives of thousands of people.Positioning The ask · 14 wordsPlease join me in honoring the life and service of my friend, Sue Rainey.

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